Abby: This was such a good idea. I love your play on procrastination. Like Natalie's Twitterive, I could really relate to this even though it is in a different way. I really liked Prof. Mangini's idea of having you show us your procrastination with the Twitterive. I think that would make it more relatable for everyone in the class. Your project had me laughing because I have found myself countless times trying to write a apaper and saying to myself, "Oh I have a week to do it... no big deal I can go out tonight..." and then a week later saying "oh shit it's due in 2 hours" I can only suggest maybe putting in a couple of genre's to diversify it but even then I don't want to see you stray away from your idea unless it works. I think you are doing a really good job! :)
Sandra: I loved all of your project. My favorite aspect was the video. DO NOT TOUCH IT OR ALTER IT IN ANYWAY!!!! It was perfect. It matched perfectly with the words of the song. I would be seriously sad if you changed it!! hahaha My suggestion is maybe you could move the Why sell it? to the end and right after that put something about it being solf and the memories staying there forever regardless of someone else living there or owning the property, that will be like a time capsule of memories. I definitely think you should keep the compilation of pieces of the house at the end and let that possibly be the last thing you have there just to tie the story together that you'll carry the memories with you. I really liked everything about your project. I couldn't help but think of my childhood home and all the memories in it and how I would feel if that house was sold... Lovely job :)
Alison: I'm so happy you found your "place" in music!! I think you can push this more and weave that throughout your Twitterive. I really like the Ukelele poem and I think you should post a video with you playing it with friends around maybe in a circle and just laughi
Eileen: I love this idea :) I really think you should make it more of a mystery like we talked about in class. If you make your relationship with running more like a person, it'll be more of a shock when you reveal it in the end. No matter which road you take with this idea, I think it's going to turn out great!!!
Elisabeth: First off, your prologue is AWESOME. I love the video and I really think it sets the mood for the rest of your Twitterive. It's okay that someone else made it for you, the idea is awesome. I think the obituaries is a great idea. Maybe you could link the antiques and the people together by putting the paragraphs and pictures together somehow. Maybe have OBITUARIES... then Rickey-Dave (his obituary) then a picture of an antique and scattered each of these around the page. If this doesn't make sense but you like the idea I can tell you in class what I mean it might sound a bit off reading it. I think the Coldplay song also sets the perfect mood for your Twitterive. Overall, I really like your project. I hope you keep going with it!
Melissa: Your project was extremely touching. Prof. Mangini was right, I really want to see an piece from the Angel book from your mother. I love your quote: "Life may bring us apart but along the way I'll carry you in my heart." I hope to see you write more about your memories with your mother. Introduce us to her. Show us your relationship. Maybe you could make Halloween just one memory but make it part of your repented that it it was your favorite holiday together. Your project is looking really great and I can't wait to see the final product!
Tricia: I really like where you are going with this. I think the whole idea of the "journey" to happiness is important and I'm glad you put that in there. Middle school is definitely a hard time in a lot of people'
s lives. I feel like that's when everything bad happens but you somehow bounce back from it and then BAM you're the person you are today. It's hard commenting on your project because I've known you since my very first day at Rowan and seeing your ups and downs is difficult from a friend perspective. I didn't know about Bern so finding out through your project was a shocker but to see things that you have been through and how happy you are today is inspiring. I really want to see what your Found Poem is going to look like at the end so keep going with it!! :)
Natalie: I had to go back and read through your entire project. I cried this time. Not only could I fully relate to your Twitterive, but I put myself in your position. Knowing what it feels like to lose a friend and try so hard to hold onto those memories is so painful but it takes a strong person to over come that. Your father was right, everything happens for a reason. Your writing is beautiful and you express every facet perfectly in your words. It flowed throughout the entire project. I actually listed to Bon Iver while I was reading it which made the whole thing even more powerful. Maybe you should consider not giving the reader and option and having that song come on when they open your page haha. It wasn't quite long enough to get to the end but it made an impact. I felt the emotion in your words even more powerfully when I heard the song. It really set the scene for me. Overall, I think this is great and most definitely one of my favorites not only because I can relate to it but it is so beautifully put together! Awesome job!!
Weebly is a great site. I have so far thoroughly enjoyed using it and finding the different functions it has. I plan on keeping this site even after WRT is finished. The only issue I have had with it is the layout change. When I found myself most stressed about the Twitterive, the layout changed on me and I kept going back and spending hours rearranging everything to make it fit. A few days later it just went back to normal. Overall it is pretty great.
YouTube is a real pain in the @$$. I found it extremely difficult to figure out how to upload a video and post into my project. I liked Vimeo better. It was a lot more user friendly but it took a while to load the video so it would be ready for my Twitterive.
Movie Maker is GREAT. It was so easy to download and figure out. I used it to create my photo montage of Jeremy with a song playing.
I used Ifaketext.com to create a fake text message to use in my Twitterive. The directions are in an earlier blog post.
I am still speechless after today's class. I feel a weight lifted off my shoulders. I realized today in presenting, that there is no harm is telling my story. There should be no fear of what others may think. If I can help at least one person smile through tragedy, it was all worth it. I came out of this workshop knowing the changes I can make. I believe I will constantly be altering this twitterive. Just like Jeremy's life, this project isn't over yet. As long as I have his memory, I can always add to this. I can't express how happy it has made me to be able to work through this project and come out feeling stronger with the entire class beside me. I feel like we have turned into one big family. I'm not afraid to open up and show emotion. What made me even happier, was the feedback from everyone. You guys got it. It's one of those things where I sat down to write and just felt defeated. I struggled putting the words down and bringing back the days that changed my life so much. I struggled letting the wall down that I have had up for so long. Once I got going I let it all out. I held nothing back and it was a humbling experience for me. I feel like this has become a new day for me. A time for change to really move forward with my life but remembering that he will always be right beside me.
As far as the rest of the presentations went, I was amazed. I was worried that mine wouldn't measure up and I still feel that way. The topics today were displayed beautifully.
Diane- What can I say? I loved it. I still love it. I think it's powerful and sad and funny all in one. I think you pulled the perfect amount of satire into your work to just make it pop. The pictures are AWESOME. I think they describe perfectly the emotion in your story. Overall, I think you really did an awesome job and I know you'll continue to revise and add things to just make it even better!!! My boyfriend and I sat on his couch Monday morning when I wasn't feeling well (and stranded there- sorry Sab Man) and read your Twitterive. He loved it also. We talked about it for the last couple of days as I continued my Twitterive process. I'm proud of you :). You are doing fantastic work and I absolutely love your writing style.
Fabio- I love the idea of your Twitterive. I can see in your nervousness how much Carmen meant to you and your family. I really like the idea of your connection between Carmen and Christmas. Maybe you should use Shannon's song- Sleeping At Last by Snow (http://www.songlyrics.com/sleeping-at-last/snow-lyrics/) :). Overall, my advice to you- have confidence!!!!! Your work has such potential if you just dig deep. I truly believe you have it in you. I want to know who Carmen is. I want to hear something from HER voice (another genre). I really think it would give your twitterive that UMPH that I'd love to see from you!! You can do it! Believe in your work!!!
SMPARRY- You are so darn creative. I love it. I never would have thought of something like your twitterive. Your music choices are phenomenal and I literally teared up when you played your dance video. I think you are so talented and it shows in your work. I'd love to see you show us in a different genre for the What is Sids. You do great work!!! :):):)
Cant wait to see everyone elses projects!!!!!!!!!
While writing my Twitterive, I decided that I wanted to replicate the conversation I had with a girlfriend of mine when I found out Jeremy was dead. I searched and searched and talked to friends with Iphone's about changing my name in their phone to make this work... Instead of going through all of this, I googled how to FAKE text and I came up with
ifaketext.com . I followed the directions:
1. Enter a name
2. Choose a carrier
3. Enter a conversation
4. Create Screenshot.
NOTE: If you want to have the cell phone say a certain time, you'll have to wait until that time to do this.
Hope this helps :) If anyone has any questions, let me know!
1) WHO are the characters in your story?
The main characters in my story are myself and a dear friend Jeremy Ramirez.
2) WHAT is your story? WHAT genres/modes are you using for your story?
My story is a compilation of memories of a friend who was tragically killed in a motorcycle ago, this time last year. I will be using many different genres for this story, including; a found poem; personal narrative; photo montage; two-voice poem; missing persons ad; thank you card; letter; wordle; recipe *other than food; and a six word story (possibly). As I continue writing and creating my twitterive, I continuously add different genres.
3) WHEN does your story take place?
My story takes place in the past; August 2003-October 28th, 2010.
4) WHERE is your place?
My place, as of right now, is a place of loss.
5) WHY do you feel a connection/lack of connection to place?
I feel a connection to this place because I am terrified of loosing my memories of him. Jeremy was such an influential person in my life and in creating who I am today. If I lost this connect, I would lose him all together- and I'm not ready for that.
6) HOW do you show your audience your connection/lack of connection to place?
I show the audience my connection to this "place" through my choice of genre and emotion. Everything about this twitterive is real, from the phone conversation, to the time he cheated on me and I forgave him and our friendship only grew stronger from that moment on. My love for this person exceeded that of any other emotion I have ever felt in my life. He was what I like to call, "My soul-mate best friend". If I called him in the middle of the night because I was drunk at the bar and needed a ride home, he would be there as fast as he could. If I felt like I had lost control and my life was spiraling downwards, he would be there to pick me up. The bond I had with him is unexplainable but through this project, I can find peace and comfort in the memories that I am left with. His memory will live on and I will show my audience this.
Technology played a huge part in this project. I was able to look at other people's parts to match mine up with theirs. It helped to create unity within the class and gave us the upper hand in creating the uniqueness of the assignment. It also helped by giving me the option of browsing through other interview questions on the internet!
Figuring out my character was pretty easy. Maybe I could even want to be a reporter. I guess I screwed up a little bit by not interviewing Jackson Stone yet but IT WILL BE DONE. I saw myself as the type of reporter you see on television asking a sports star questions about their love life. I guess I watched enough America's Next Top Model to know how to interview someone.
1. Jackson Stone, I understand you may not be who we think you are according to People’s Magazine Muscle Issue. Would you like to explain to the world who you really are?
2. With a hard to believe record of 73-1-1 with 23 Kos, do you think this will even be a challenge for you?
3. Mr. Stone, it seems it has been quite some time since your last fight, are you sure you are ready and able to perform to the best of your abilities towards such a tough opponent?
4. How do you feel about going up against a female opponent with a record like hers?
5. Do you think your tough upbringing, with your parents abandoning you and leaving you to arm wrestle your way through the streets, made you the fighter you are today?
6. There have been a couple speculations about your use of human growth hormones in your career, can you confirm or deny this?
7. How are you preparing differently for this match to win the WRT2 title back?
8. Does being lactose intolerant have any effect on your performance?
9. If you win this match and reclaim your title, is that the last we will see of Jackson Stone?
10. Winter of 2014 comes the Olympics, do you have an plans to bring the gold back home from Russia?
11. Are there any last words you wish to say to Black Jack before your match?
12. And my last question for you Jackson Stone, is this time for realsies?
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